Wednesday, September 8, 2010

Cross Country




Cross Country Narrative:

With my heart pounding and a body trembling with fear, I looked around noticing age signs on
chairs and bright colours walking around the school. “ Aaaaaaaa!!” I screamed “ Cross Country? Why would they do this to us kids!! The horror, the pain”

As I had closed my eyes , butterflies started flying around and around, making me sick!! I thought that if I could ring my Mum then I could get out of this mess and she could explain to my teacher that I couldn’t run. As my class had strolled out of the classroom, I thought that I had the chance but then “ Come on Ala , the race is nearly starting!!” I heard Miss Garden say “ Ohh, why God, why does this have to happen to me!!”I whispered to myself

As I stood up ready to walk over to the starting line, my face started to go green!! I couldn’t bare the agony anymore , but I couldn’t let Tainui ( my Team) down. As Mr Burt walked over to the start line,through the gluey, sticky mud he was ready to start the race. “On your mark” “ No!” I whispered to myself, putting my legs apart in position, “ Get Set!” ......... “ BANG!”

Zooming past many 11 year old girls, I could already feel the spongy mud between my toes.... “yuck”.As the throng went soundless, I had just passed the gate, making my way to the reserve. My heart started pounding, while my throat was screaming for icy cold water.As a lethargic feeling had came over me, my knee started to burn like scorching hot lava.But I knew that it wouldn’t get in the way! “ 100m away” I had said to myself, knowing that I was running with excruciating pain.

“20m to go!” I said to myself!The multitude started to get louder and louder! As I nearly made it to the finish, I looked over my shoulder and saw Mubasshira trip! I couldn’t help but laugh!! My knee started to act like it was the boss of me, saying to stop!! But I couldn’t!
“ Come on Ala, Don’t let your team down” I had exclaimed, I was just a few metres away from the people being proud of me!!


“I”ve made it!” I shouted, coming.. coming LAST!! I looked around me and had just noticed that everyone was laughing at me!! I thought that I had came first, pushing my luck!! But I didn’t. I hadn’t thought that I could come this far, non STOP

At the end of every Cross Country event, I think even though I was pushing myself to excel in the 11 year old Cross Country run, I think that I am still proud of myself. For actually TRYING!!

6 comments:

  1. WOW Ala I really like your story I like that you said come on Ala don't let your team down that is so kind of you.

    well I liked reading your story looking forward for an other.

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  2. Hi Hainite,

    Thank you very much for leaving me a comment on one of my blog posts. I hope that you read more of them and also that you become hooked in to it. Once again thank you very much!

    Yours Truly, Ala

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  3. Hi Ala,

    That was awesome writing.I loved all of the interesting vocab you used. Well done. My favourite part was at the end when it was like you were coming first but then everyone is laughing at you because you came last.
    Keep up the great work

    Litia

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  4. Hi Ala,

    That was such a awesome story, I loved it. My favourite part was when you thought you came 1st but unfortunately, you didn't. It was such a cool part of the story. That made the narrative much more juicy.

    Why don't you come to my blog and read my narrative about Cross Country. There is a surprise for you. Here is the link for my blog
    pesmubasshiram.blogspot.com
    or just click on my name above.

    Your Sincerely,
    Mubasshira

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  5. Hi Litia,

    Thank you very, very much for leaving me a comment on one of my blog posts! I hope that you read more of them and also leave some more comments. Once again, Thank you!

    Yours truly, Ala

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  6. Hi Mubasshira,

    Thank you very, very much for leaving me a comment on one of my blog posts! I hope that you read more of them and also leave some more comments. Once again, Thank you!

    Yours truly, Ala

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